Fiction: Twisted Family Bonds (pt.4): Ouch!

This is one of my #FridayFlash fiction stories. Each Friday, members of the #FridayFlash group on Twitter write fictional stories of 1,000 words or less and share them. Join in the fun!

This flash fiction is part of a series called Twisted Family Bonds (follow the link to read from the beginning). It is a mixture of light and dark humor written in the soap opera episodic style about the happenings in the Kaszinov family, who live on a family compound in the Hungarian countryside near Budapest. Russian mafia members have family lives, too, they just behave a little differently, or do they?

Previously in Mafia Rehab…Inna, the Hungarian Child Welfare worker began an evaluation on the Kaszinov family to assure they had an appropriate home before their daughter Tasha returned their children.  Tasha brought Inna to the Kaszinov family compound during a wild party celebrating their freedom from indictment.  Viktor drugged Inna’s wine and they all cleaned up the house. However, still Inna court-ordered them to attend a Mothers And Fathers Impaired Attachment (MAFIA) rehab support group.

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Episode 4 of 6: Ouch!

Kaszinov Family Crest

Let’s have ’em all, empty those pockets! No one is going in until you have been searched and pass the metal detectors.” Inna was supervising the security checkpoint at the child welfare office building. This was the first meeting of her new Mothers And Fathers Impaired Attachment (MAFIA) rehab support group.  As the newly appointed head of the organized crime unit of the Budapest Child Welfare division, Inna was anxious to try new methods to turn these people into better parents.

“Take it easy!” Alena scowled at the security guards firmly patting her down in every crease of her sixty-five year old body. “Grusha, Nadya, get over here.”

“Gladly.” Alena’s sisters giggled and flirted with the security guard who began touching them everywhere.

“Those are family heirlooms, I expect everything returned in perfect condition!” Viktor growled as he placed his guns and knives in the tray.  He walked resolutely through the metal detector and extinguished his cigar on the floor. Viktor glanced at the security checkpoint on the opposite side of the atrium.  His fiercest rival, Rudolf Zabrovsky and his Family members were just beginning to check their weapons.  Viktor secretly motioned to his Boys standing near the entrance. Viktor whispered to each family member as they passed the security point. They moved quickly to the meeting room on the first floor.

Viktor entered the large dimly lit room and stood by the window as his wife, Alena, her sisters and all their adult children found seats near the back.   As Viktor sat down near the exit, the Zabrovsky Family came clamoring into the room until they laid eyes on the Kaszinov Family. They fell silent. Rudolf Zabrovsky stopped dead. His son whispered in his ear and they both walked to the opposite side of the room.  Viktor sat filing his nails refusing to acknowledge Rudolf Zabrovsky’s presence. The two men had not seen each other for over ten years, but their Families were deeply entwined in fierce competition for the Hungarian territory.

On the chalkboard in the front of the room, someone had erased, Mothers And Fathers Impaired Attachment and wrote in its place, Mothers And Fathers Insultingly Annoyed. The room echoed with shuffling and silence.

Inna boldly entered the room with three other nervous adults. She went to the chalkboard and erased what was written. “Welcome to the first meeting of the MAFIA rehab support group.” She slyly smiled and introduced the other instructors.

“You are all here to learn how to be more nurturing, caring and attentive parents.  I commend your willingness to have parents and grandparents attend these meetings together.” The sly smile erupted again. She knew they were court-ordered to attend under the threat of prison time.

Viktor was now sitting still as a stone, only his eyes moved. The Kaszinov women were nervously shifting in their chairs. The young men were watching for cues from Viktor.

“A family is the group of people you trust. It is the parent’s responsibility to lead the family. Here you will learn new ways to care for each other.”  Inna turned the lights off and closed the shades to start a slide presentation.

Viktor silently rose from his seat and motioned for the women of his family to leave. They shuffled out as Viktor shot a red laser beam out the window near the Zabovsky Family.  Gun shots showered that side of the room.  The closed blinds crashed to the floor and light flooded the scene.  The instructors tried to reach the emergency security button. Members of the Zabrovsky Family rushed the door and pushed to get out. The instructors and the several Zabrovsky men were trapped in the front of the room crawling on the floor to dodge the bullets.

The Kaszinov women smiled as they escaped unharmed into the hall, but they were grabbed by several Zabrovsky women. Old and young were pulling hair, tripping and kicking each other in a rumble.

Viktor rushed out the door before the stampede, but a bloody arm grabbed him. “You son of a bitch!” Rudolf’s deep raspy voice meant nothing to Viktor.  The two Family bosses had a long gruesome history. Rudolf lunged at Viktor, slamming him into the railing of the stairs leading to the basement.

Viktor was leaning backwards grabbing Rudolf by the neck. “You goddamn fool!  Did you really think we would let you just walk out of here after what you did to my Family?”

Viktor pushed Rudolf and he began falling towards the stairs.  Rudolf  kicked Viktor’s legs as he was falling and both men tumbled, fighting their way down a steep flight of concrete stairs. They groaned and swore vengeance as the sharp edges of the stairs gouged into their ribs as they rolled. Their bones cracked and heads crunched as they repeatedly hit the concrete.  By the time they fell to the bottom, the world went black for Viktor and Rudolf.

Police and several ambulances arrived on the scene and teams loaded up victims and perpetrators.  The women from both Families had scratches, lacerations and bruises.  Inna only suffered minor injuries, but her instructors were gravely injured. Several men were carried on stretchers with blood oozing from various appendages.

Later that night, Viktor awoke in his hospital bed feeling excruciating pain.  Surprised to find he was placed in a double room, he painfully tried to take a deep breath in order to scream for a nurse. He stopped cold when he noticed the man in the next bed. Rudolf Zabrovsky.


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48 responses to “Fiction: Twisted Family Bonds (pt.4): Ouch!”

  1. HILARIOUS! I love your mind.

    1. Thanks so much! I just wish my mind loved me when I am trying to finish this series!!heehee

  2. […] in Twisted Family Bonds (pt.4)…Inna, the Hungarian Child Welfare worker held her first Mothers And Fathers Impaired […]

  3. I loved the placement of ““Those are family heirlooms, I expect everything returned in perfect condition!” ” , with it coming straigh after the giddy old girls being frisked by the security guard!

    Much fun as always – but I am now very worried about the other patients unfortunate enough to find themselves in that hospital at this time!

    1. Thanks Maria!

      You are very astute, I wondered if anyone would catch that placement of “family heirlooms” after the aunts, wondering if it was in reference to them. It made me giggle.

      It’s everyone for themselves in the hospital now.

  4. I hope Viktor and Rudolf are sufficiently cinched to their beds. Injury to bones and pain won’t stop them from trying to take each other out.
    So entertaining, Anne. Great writing.

    1. Hi Cynthia,

      Ha! Good idea about cinching them to the bed. I hope the hospital realizes what they have done.

  5. Uh-oh. High drama to continue. Great continuation, and I’m anxious to see where it’s going next.

    1. Thanks Eric, I’m glad you are enjoying this series!

  6. Oh, I absolutely love this! The thought that Budapest Child Welfare has a security checkpoint with metal detectors made me ROFL! And they have an organised crime unit – genius!

    I reckon Inna’s got her work cut out with this bunch. 🙂

    1. Hi Sam,

      Thanks for your comments. Inna is definitely optimistic, and willing to take on a challenge.

  7. G.P. Ching

    The only way these people will behave is under anesthesia! Fun story, Anne!

    1. Thanks G.P., I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  8. Virginia Moffatt

    You’d think that welfare officer might have thought a bit about bringing these two families together,eh?

    Nice touch to have the enemies in neighbouring beds…

    1. Thanks for reading, Virginia.

      Yes, you would think, some people are just too optimistic, or stupid. Hehe.

  9. I may be a different kind of Flash Fiction writer by writing stories in a series. But, that is how my mind works and I do plan to write other series.

    The episodes of my series will always be together on my site, but I have to do installments to keep it Flash fiction. I have done my best to try and make them self-contained for the new reader.

    I post an announcement of my series on my sidebar with a link to the first episode. If anyone wants to read the entire series in one sitting, you can start with that link, and every episode ends with a link to the next episode. I also include links at the beginning of each episode to the beginning. I plan to condense each series onto it’s own page when they are completed.

    Thanks for all your comments. I want to thank my loyal readers for following my series!

    And, stay tuned, I will be posting each of the series I write on a new website that is being formed to feature serial fiction. It is an old form writing recast for the web!

  10. While I feel the way Chance does – prefering to keep my series together, this particular one is not hard to keep straight in my head. Love the setting and the people. I hope you DO, at some point, keep it all together for us to read in toto, rather than installments – I might find even more to appreciate!

    1. Thanks, glad you liked it. And, glad the episode stood on it’s own for you. Your comments give me more to think about that I will put in a separate comment, thanks.

  11. Josie (@safetycomfort)

    Hey, great story and I do like your alternative renderings of M.A.F.I.A. Now I want to go back and read the first instalments! Look forward to reading more 🙂

    1. Josie,
      Welcome! Thanks so much for stopping by. It is so nice when new faces come over to read, especially when someone discovers these stories who isn’t in FridayFlash. I love following you on Twitter!

  12. Ouch indeed! Now I can’t wait to find out what Rudolf and Victor end up doing to the hospital 😛

    1. Hi Estrella! Nice to see you! Yes, I had to do it to them. They just weren’t done with each other. Hehe.

  13. Great ending! Goodness knows what they’ll do to the hospital.

    I also liked the line: “Those are family heirlooms, I expect everything returned in perfect condition!”

    I’m enjoying this farcical fridayflash soap opera.

    1. Thanks David, I’m glad you are enjoying the weekly soap opera, you are a loyal reader like so many others and I greatly appreciate it.

  14. Well, I wasn’t expecting *that* at all! And the ending was cool.

    1. Hi,

      Thanks! I think maybe goldi-locks should come over for a visit, she might fit right in.

  15. Too funny! Yeah, it’s going to be hard to get these two families to behave “normally.” Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

    CD

    1. Hi Cecilia,

      Thanks for stopping by. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  16. By the time I get halfway through your stories my jaw is hanging open. These are such fun to read and I love the characters. Can’t wait for the next installment.

    1. Laurita,

      Thanks, I’m always happy to get a jaw dropped. That tickles me. Now you can pick it back up, you look silly.

  17. Ha Ha! Viktor and Rudolf in the same room. I like that. It will be hard for Inna to find willing instructors after this, I think.

    1. Thanks Laura,

      I think the Budapest child welfare office is one of the few that offers hazard pay as a benefit.

  18. Well I like the anonymous writer’s acronym for MAFIA better than the original. 🙂
    Great work here, as per usual, Anne. The tension when they gathered together was palpable, and how great that Viktor and Rudolf end up in the same hospital room. Can’t wait to hear what chaos ensues there!

    1. Deanna,

      Thanks for your comments and support. I love the idea of Viktor and Rudolf being vulnerable together.

  19. Great continuation and fun seeing these characters in a workshop. Kooky and zany. On design: I like bold letters–looks nice in this font and gives the eye more movement. The inset pictures sit nice on the page.

    1. Thanks David, I’m glad you like the visuals, I enjoy putting them in and hope to do more in the future.

  20. I was wondering if this series of stories is going to finite ? I much prefer to read things like this when all the parts are there and there has been some great tit bits to wet the appetite. But I think i might wait a bit before picking it up again.

    1. Hi Chance,

      So sorry to lose you as a reader. I’m not quite sure what you mean by – all the parts are there – and there has been some tid bits to…. I do have all the stories posted. Sorry if it is hard to read if you haven’t read the other installments. I try to give an update at the top to make it easier for readers who haven’t followed along. I will be ending this series in a few weeks.

      1. Anne, you misunderstand me, your not loosing me as a reader. On a personal level, I find it hard to keep track of serialised stories on the web. I would much rather wait till the entire series is up, so I can read through the parts, knowing that the entire story is there. I made the exact same comment over at David G.Shrock site about his series here

        http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2009/12/dunston-monster-contents/

        I very much like the characters in this.

        1. Ah, I see. I understand now. I do the same thing with LOST on TV, save all the episodes to watch all at once. I’m glad you like the characters.

          I understand how hard it is to remember details in serials when we have so many FridayFlashes to read.

          Thanks for your honesty and clarification. I am a new fiction writer and really want to write stories that others are interested in.

  21. Loved this bit the most: “organized crime unit of the Budapest Child Welfare division”

    What a kooky society you’ve cooked up Anne!

    1. Thanks Lily,they are “kooky” indeed! Ha!

  22. Haven’t the authorities learned they just invite trouble on their heads in trying to reform these incorrigible pugilists? What good is a panic button in a classroom when the bullets are flying?

    Ding ding, seconds out, Round 5 – can’t wait!

    1. Hi Marc,

      You make me giggle! Some people just never learn!

  23. And the story continues…
    great work 🙂

    1. Thanks Michelle, I’m glad you stopped by for a read!!

  24. Oh, how wonderfully this story continues!

    So the Family just can’t do meetings, eh?

    Loved how you described Victor and Rudolf’s fight and fall down the stairs. OW!

    And as roomies? Wow oh wow.

    More, please.

    1. Thanks Marisa! No, I don’t think meetings or workshops are their thing.

      I just had to get those two together without their weapons – hehe!

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